Content on this part is kind of lacking details. You didn’t really mention why the girl slapped the guy after he kissed her. Is it because the girl were offended or ...? You need to be more expressive on the feelings the girl had toward "him". Also the ending was a little bit abrupt. Overall I’ll give you 6. Keep the good work!
网友：Eileen 打分：0 [2004-01-20 05:05:18]
Content on this part is kind of lacking details. You didn’t really mention why the girl slapped the guy after he kissed her. Is it because the girl were offended or ...? You need to be more expressive on the feelings the girl had toward "him". Also the ending was a little bit abrupt. Overall I’ll give you 6. Keep the good work!